Wednesday, September 29, 2004

BTK Gets International Attention

Thirty years ago, a notorious serial killer terrorized the entire city of Wichita. His killing spree included whole families, single women... It seemed there wasn't anyone who was safe. Just this year, however, he has reappeared; not in the form of a killer on the loose, but in the form of someone giving clues to the police and media outlets as to who he is and why he did what he did.

They called him BTK because of the way he tortured his victims. He would Bind, Torture and then Kill them. No one has been able to catch him. It is suspected that since he disappeared for 30 years he might have been incarcerated somewhere for some crime that he wasn't so lucky to not be caught at. But no one is sure.

All of a sudden, a British film crew decided to come to Wichita to do a documentary on the notorious killer, and they brought a psychic medium to help shed some light on the case for Wichita police.

You can read more about the story from KAKE TV's badly-in-need-of-editing story that they posted on their website by clicking here. Video is supposed to be included, but I don't have time to look at it to see if it works. Hopefully it does.

Bonus points to those who can list some of the items that need to be edited from the story.

2 comments:

Devona said...

Wierd...

I'm gonna take a stab at your assignment (what's with Lutherans and homework lately?).

I got two things at least. One: "high-profileest" should be highest-profile or most high-profile. Two: either call the medium "Dennis" or "McKenzie" not both, and preferably "McKenzie."

I'm not sure if my number three is personal preference or something in need of editing because I'm not trained in the journalistic style. But I think the frequent paragraph changing is a bit distracting.

Do I get the extra points?!!

Mrs. T. Swede said...

You do! Good job! The frequent paragraphing is a style of broadcast journalism that helps break up the phrasing. In print journalism, which this would be since it's in print form, regardless of the fact that it's electronic, it is better to break paragraphs less frequently, but keep them short since it's easier to read. For instance, broadcast journalists like to keep paragraphs to one or two sentences. In the newspaper, you'll notice, there are more three- and four-sentence paragraphs.

A hint: I count nine editing errors, three of which you caught. Good job! You get three points out of a possible nine. Can you or anyone else spot the others?